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20．什么樣的爸爸才是好爸爸？最近流行的電視真人秀節(jié)目"爸爸去哪兒哪？（Where Are We Going，Dad？）"引起了大家對這個問題的廣泛關(guān)注．
請聯(lián)系生活實際談?wù)勀阈哪恐械暮冒职郑瑑?nèi)容包括：
闡明父愛對孩子成長的重要性；
好爸爸應(yīng)該具備的特征；（特征至少兩點）
你對自己爸爸的感受．
要求：語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，字數(shù)120詞左右．
What kind of father is a good father？Recently，a popular TV Reality show"Where Are We Going，Dad？"has brought it to the public's attention again．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息講述什么樣的爸爸才是好爸爸．寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個要點：闡明父愛對孩子成長的重要性；好爸爸應(yīng)該具備的特征；（特征至少兩點）你對自己爸爸的感受．2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：public's attention公眾的注意；play an important role 起重要的作用；set a good example for 為…樹立好的榜樣；is occupied with 忙于；protect…from…保護…免受

解答 What kind of father is a good father？Recently，a popular TV Reality show"Where Are We Going，Dad？"has brought it to the public's attention again．There is no doubt that fathers play an important role during their kids'growing up．（高分句型）In reality，some fathers'absence in their kids'life has caused some family problems．In this TV show，five fathers set a good example for their kids by helping them deal with pressure，understanding their desires，setting achievable goals．（高分句型）Besides，they give their children affection and warmth whenever necessary．
   My father is such a person．He seems strict but in the soul he is kind．During the weekdays，he is occupied with his work，but at weekends，we usually spend time together watching movies or doing some sports．And he shows me every father should be like a mountain to protect their kids from harm and teach them in a wise way．（高分句型）

點評 應(yīng)該注意適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)以使行文連貫，比如適當(dāng)選用表示因果、遞進、轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系的連接詞，使文章流暢、通順，并避免因反復(fù)使用句式相同的簡單句而造成的單調(diào)感．（1）認真審題，確定體裁． （2）構(gòu)思要點．根據(jù)題目要求，理解要表達的要點．設(shè)計好文章的層次段落，考慮所用時態(tài)、人稱等，把要點串聯(lián)起來，構(gòu)成文章框架．（3）選詞造句，避難選易．（4）認真檢查，避免錯誤．仔細閱讀全文，查找是否有錯，注意時態(tài)、單詞拼寫、字母大小寫、標點是否有誤，句式是否正確．邏輯是否一致．