12.I was time to go home."Remember to work on your class speeches for homework,"Miss Walker called,as everyone started talking and packing their school bags.Jenny felt sick.She hated having to read aloud in class.She was sure everyone got really bored listening to her.Once,when Jenny was reading out her holiday diary,Leewas even looking at his watch,a silver and blue one which seemed just magical.
Jenny watched Lee walk ahead of her as they left school.He seemed so clever,and he had a certain sort of shining confidence.He was just one of those people who were good at everything.Jenny sighed.As she turned the corner,she saw Lee's watch lying right in the middle of the path.
Jenny knew she should just pick it up and return it to him,but shed didn't want to run after him.jenny bent down quickly,picked up the watch and ran home.On arriving home,Jenny put it on almost without thinking.She was surprised it fitted so well.She walked to the mirror and started practicing her speech.Words just flooded out of her."I'm going to talk about swimming.I have been lucky.I've won lots of competitions.But when I'm in a race,I'm not really thinking about winning.I'm just loving the feeling of being in the water…"Jenny laughed with excitement.She walked across the room.She suddenly seemed to have a certain sort of confidence.Turning back to the mirror,Jenny saw a flash of light from the watch in the glass.The flashes of silver seemed almost magical.So maybe Lee's watch Lee's watch really DID have something magic about it.
The next day,as the lesson began,Miss Walker asked who was going to be brave and go first.Nobody moved.Jenny slowly raised her arm.Before Miss Walker could say anything,there was a shout from behind."She's stolen my watch!"Lee said angrily,"It went missing at school yesterday."
注意:
1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;
2.應(yīng)使用5個以上短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語;
3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段,每段的開頭語已為你寫好;
4.續(xù)寫完成后,請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語.
Paragraph 1:
Everybody was fixing their eyes on Jenny,waiting for an explanation.Jennydidn't answer.How could she explain about the watchand its magic?No one could understand.No one could believe."But I saw you wearing it yesterday,"Miss Walkergently reminded him.For a moment Leeremained silent and then he apologized he had just remembered that.Jenny was relieved saying she had found it on the way home and decided to return it after thespeech.Everybody was puzzled and asked why.Jenny again was speechless.[78 words]
Paragraph 2
At that,Miss Walker smiled and asked the class to listen to Jenny's speech.Jenny made her way to the platform with every confidence.Words began to flood outof her."How could she make it?We've never seen Jenny give so terrific a speech."Whispers went around the classroom,and even Miss Walker nodded with approval.Immediately Jenny finished her speech,a storm of applause erupted from the class.Relieved,Jenny told everyone the truth,and especially the magic of the watch."But it's just an ordinary watch with no magic",Lee announced.[80 words].
分析 寫好這類作文要注意幾個步驟:1. 認真審題,找準(zhǔn)提示語中的關(guān)鍵詞或句,確定中心思想.2. 依據(jù)關(guān)鍵句,草擬提綱,梳理文章的脈絡(luò)3. 準(zhǔn)確定位人稱、時態(tài).注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次.4.最后還要認真查驗是否有漏寫情況,有無拼寫錯誤及標(biāo)點誤用等
高分句型一:
Jenny was relieved saying she had found it on the way home and decided to return it after the speech
詹妮松了一口氣說,她在回家的路上發(fā)現(xiàn)了,決定演講后返回.
高分句型二:
Immediately Jenny finished her speech,a storm of applause erupted from the class.
詹妮一結(jié)束她的演講,從班上爆發(fā)了一陣暴風(fēng)雨般的掌聲.
解答 Possible version 1:
Everybody was fixing their eyes on Jenny,waiting for an explanation.Jenny didn't answer.How could she explain about the watch and its magic?No one could understand.No one could believe."But I saw you wearing it yesterday,"Miss Walker gently reminded him.For a moment Lee remained silent and then he apologized he had just remembered that.Jenny was relieved saying she had found it on the way home and decided to return it after the speech(高分句型一).Everybody was puzzled and asked why.Jenny again was speechless.[78 words]
Possible version 2:
At that,Miss Walker smiled and asked the class to listen to Jenny's speech first.Jenny made her way to the platform with every confidence.Words began to flood out of her."How could she make it?We've never seen Jenny give so terrific a speech."Whispers went around the classroom,and even Miss Walker nodded with approval.Immediately Jenny finished her speech,a storm of applause erupted from the class(高分句型二).Relieved,Jenny told everyone the truth,and especially the magic of the watch."But it's just an ordinary watch with no magic",Lee announced.[80 words]
點評 開放性作文給出一定的寫作主題,并此為基礎(chǔ)進行思維和聯(lián)想,自由發(fā)揮.不僅考查學(xué)生在內(nèi)容、結(jié)構(gòu)安排、語言運用和組織方面的能力,而且對學(xué)生的想像力、發(fā)散思維、歸納判斷能力也有很高的要求.