Question

14．假設(shè)你是李華，是一家英文雜志社的心理咨詢師．某中學(xué)生Cathy偏胖，想節(jié)食減肥，征求你的意見．請你給她回一封信，談?wù)勀銓υ搯栴}的見解．內(nèi)容要點如下：
（1）健康比漂亮更重要；
（2）學(xué)生以學(xué)習(xí)為主，不要過于注重外貌和別人的看法；
（3）可通過多鍛煉身體保持健康，要改變不良的飲食習(xí)慣；
（4）健康的心態(tài)也很重要．
注意：
1．短文必須包括所有內(nèi)容要點，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；2．詞數(shù)：80左右；
參考詞匯：心態(tài)：state of mind
Dear Cathy，
I have received and read your letter，in which you mentioned that you wanted to lose weight by dieting．
         ．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本題為提綱類寫作，根據(jù)材料所給的提示，寫一封回信，寫作要點包括：（1）健康比漂亮更重要；（2）學(xué)生以學(xué)習(xí)為主，不要過于注重外貌和別人的看法；（3）可通過多鍛煉身體保持健康，要改變不良的飲食習(xí)慣；（4）健康的心態(tài)也很重要．寫作時以第一人稱為主，時態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時為主要時態(tài)．
重點詞匯：lose weight （減肥）；diet（飲食）；in one's opinion（在某人看來）；eating habits（飲食習(xí)慣）；help sb with sth （幫助某人做某事）； look forward to （期待，渴望）
高分句型：1．It is only natural that young girls at your age hope to look beautiful．
                      it在句中做形式主語，真正的主語是后面的that從句．
                      2．However，①if you do want to lose weight，②it is a good idea to do it by getting more exercise and changing unhealthy eating habits．
                       ①if引導(dǎo)一個條件狀語從句；②it在句中做形式主語，后面的不定式短語是句子的真正主語．

解答 Dear Xiao Wang，
I have received and read your letter，in which you mentioned that you wanted to lose weight by dieting．
It is only natural that young girls at your age hope to look beautiful（高分句型一）．However，in my opinion，health is more important than beauty．For a student，studying is the first thing to consider while appearance is the second．So do not let others'opinions affect your normal life．However，if you do want to lose weight，it is a good idea to do it by getting more exercise and changing unhealthy eating habits（高分句型二）．The most important thing is that you keep a healthy state of mind，as it will help with your studies，and will also help you overcome difficulties in dieting．
I hope my advice will be helpful to you and I'm looking forward to your next letter．
Yours，
Li Hua

點評 提綱作文在寫作時要注意要點的提煉要全，關(guān)鍵短語和句型要寫對，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，還要注意人稱和時態(tài)使用要正確．盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次