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3．假如你是李明，你的外教老師Tom來(lái)信詢(xún)問(wèn)你校和諧校園的創(chuàng)建情況．請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下內(nèi)容提示，簡(jiǎn)要回復(fù)此次活動(dòng)給你校帶來(lái)的主要變化：
①園環(huán)境的變化；
②同學(xué)、師生關(guān)系的變化；
③學(xué)習(xí)氛圍的變化；
④自己的感受；
參考詞匯：harmonious 和諧的       environment 環(huán)境      attractive 吸引人的；迷人的．
注意：詞數(shù)100左右，信的格式和開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好，不計(jì)入總次數(shù)．
Dear Tom，
I'm writing to tell you something about the harmonious school activity，which makes many changes on our campus．
As is known to all，a harmonious school life is important to high school students．（高分句型一）On the one hand，the environment in our school gets better and better．With more and more trees and flowers planted，our school looks more beautiful．（高分句型二）We can have a good rest and put our heart into study．On the other hand，the atmosphere among people is very harmonious．Students get along well with each other．We do respect our teacher and they also do love us．Our school is just like big family．We will have a good mood and enjoy being together．
In my opinion，I think we should try our best to build a harmonious school life．I like studying in such a beautiful school．Let's do what we can from now on to make our school more and more attractive．（高分句型三）
Yours，
Li Ming．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)屬于提綱類(lèi)作文，根據(jù)提示信息假如你是李明，你的外教老師Tom來(lái)信詢(xún)問(wèn)你校和諧校園的創(chuàng)建情況．請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下內(nèi)容提示，簡(jiǎn)要回復(fù)此次活動(dòng)給你校帶來(lái)的主要變化，寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點(diǎn)包括：①園環(huán)境的變化；②同學(xué)、師生關(guān)系的變化；③學(xué)習(xí)氛圍的變化；④自己的感受；2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語(yǔ)，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來(lái)寫(xiě)．本文寫(xiě)作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：As is known to all眾所周知；On the one hand一方面；On the other hand另一方面；get along well with 與…相處的好；In my opinion以我的觀點(diǎn)來(lái)看；
As is known to all，a harmonious school life is important to high school students．（高分句型一）
With more and more trees and flowers planted，our school looks more beautiful．（高分句型二）
Let's do what we can from now on to make our school more and more attractive．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Tom，
       I'm writing to tell you something about the harmonious school activity，which makes many changes on our campus．
       As is known to all，a harmonious school life is important to high school students．（高分句型一）On the one hand，the environment in our school gets better and better．With more and more trees and flowers planted，our school looks more beautiful．（高分句型二）We can have a good rest and put our heart into study．On the other hand，the atmosphere among people is very harmonious．Students get along well with each other．We do respect our teacher and they also do love us．Our school is just like big family．We will have a good mood and enjoy being together．
        In my opinion，I think we should try our best to build a harmonious school life．I like studying in such a beautiful school．Let's do what we can from now on to make our school more and more attractive．（高分句型三）
                                                         Yours，
                                                        Li Ming

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫(xiě)作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫(xiě)作過(guò)程中綜合運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言的能力．在撰寫(xiě)時(shí)要注意主謂語(yǔ)一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語(yǔ)言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無(wú)誤的句子；二是寫(xiě)作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫(xiě)作方面的基本方法和技巧．