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4．假定你校將舉行一個成人儀式，你將作為代表在儀式上發(fā)言，請你按以下內(nèi)容要點準備一篇英文發(fā)言稿．
（1）過去對成年的向往：
（2）現(xiàn)在的感受和認識；
（3）將來的目標及措施．
注意：
（1）詞數(shù)100左右
（2）文中不能出現(xiàn)本人相關信息．
（3）可以適當增加細節(jié)，使行文連貫．
（4）發(fā)言稿的開頭與結束語已為你寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)．
Good morning，everyone!
The topic of my speech today is"Thoughts on becoming a grown-up"．
As a child，I always hoped that I could grow up as soon as possible so that I could have whatever I wanted and do whatever I liked．【高分句型】（過去對成年的向往）Now I'm a grown-up，but I find things do not go as I expected．（現(xiàn)在的感受）Although I can enjoy more freedom，at the same time I realize that being a grown-up not only means this，but also more responsibilities．【高分句型】（現(xiàn)在的認識）I hope to do more for my parents and society in the future to make my life more meaningful．（將來的目標）To reach the goal，I must first try my best to pass the college entrance examination and enter a good university．（要采取的措施）
Thank you for your listening．

Answer 1

分析 本作文為應用文，根據(jù)所給要點內(nèi)容寫一篇在校成人儀式上的發(fā)言稿，屬于提綱作文．時態(tài)為一般過去時和一般現(xiàn)在時．人稱以第一人稱為主．
【亮點說明】本文結構緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：重要短語：grow up （成長），not only …，but also（不但…而且），reach the goal （實現(xiàn)目標…），try one's best…（努力做），enter a good university（上好大學）．
As a child，I always hoped that I could grow up as soon as possible so that I could have whatever I wanted and do whatever I liked．【高分句型】
Although I can enjoy more freedom，at the same time I realize that being a grown-up not only means this，but also more responsibilities．【高分句型】

解答 Good morning，everyone!
    The topic of my speech today is"Thoughts on becoming a grown-up．"
    As a child，I always hoped that I could grow up as soon as possible so that I could have whatever I wanted and do whatever I liked．【高分句型】（過去對成年的向往）Now I'm a grown-up，but I find things do not go as I expected．（現(xiàn)在的感受）Although I can enjoy more freedom，at the same time I realize that being a grown-up not only means this，but also more responsibilities．【高分句型】（現(xiàn)在的認識）I hope to do more for my parents and society in the future to make my life more meaningful．（將來的目標）To reach the goal，I must first try my best to pass the college entrance examination and enter a good university．（要采取的措施）
    Thank you for your listening．

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