Question

【題目】假定你是某國(guó)外旅游雜志的編輯，最近要刊登了一組世界文明古跡的圖片，其中包括下面的圖片。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所給關(guān)鍵詞，用英語(yǔ)寫一段說(shuō)明，以便隨圖刊登。

The Great Wall

about 21,196 kilometres

15 provinces and cities

more than 2,000 years

the Spring and Autumn period

Qin Shihuang

注意: 1. 詞數(shù)150左右； 2. 可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

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Answer 1

【答案】This is the Great Wall in China, one of the greatest wonders in the world.

The Great Wall spreads about 21,196 kilometres from east to west of China and covers 15 provinces and cities including Beijing and Tianjin and so on. With a history of more than 2,000 years, some parts of the Great Wall are now in ruins or even entirely disappeared. But it still attracts lots of visitors all over the world and there is even a saying that he who doesn’t reach the Great Wall is not a true man.

The Great Wall was firstly built in the Spring and Autumn period, and it was in Qin dynasty that Qin Shihuang successfully joined the walls together, becoming the Great Wall. It was difficult to build such a wall in the ancient days without any modern tools. All the work was done by hand and this is the reason why it is called a wonder of humans.

【解析】

本文是一篇看圖作文，要求考生根據(jù)圖片信息用英語(yǔ)寫一段說(shuō)明，介紹圖片里的世界文明古跡，據(jù)圖片可知是中國(guó)的長(zhǎng)城。所以文章要使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和第三人稱。

第一步：審題。文章介紹世界文明古跡：長(zhǎng)城。使用第三人稱和一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。

第二步：組織要點(diǎn)：長(zhǎng)城是世界奇觀之一，沿途包括15個(gè)省和城市，長(zhǎng)約21,192公里，有2000多年的歷史；始建于春秋戰(zhàn)國(guó)時(shí)期，在秦朝時(shí)建成。

第三步：根據(jù)提示及關(guān)鍵詞（組）進(jìn)行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時(shí)態(tài)問(wèn)題。

第四步：連句成文，注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞進(jìn)行句子之間的銜接與過(guò)渡，書寫一定要規(guī)范清晰，保持整潔美觀的卷面是非常重要的。

范文讀圖準(zhǔn)確，要點(diǎn)齊備，很好地完成了所有的人物。全文沒(méi)有中國(guó)式英語(yǔ)，體現(xiàn)出很高的語(yǔ)言素養(yǎng)。在文章里作者運(yùn)用了較多的高級(jí)句式，如強(qiáng)調(diào)句型：it was in Qin dynasty that Qin Shihuang successfully joined the walls together。非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞... becoming the Great Wall.定語(yǔ)從句this is the reason why it is called a wonder of humans.這些高級(jí)句式的運(yùn)用很好地提升了文章的層次。