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18．假定英語(yǔ)課上老師要求同桌之間交換修改作文，請(qǐng)你修改你同桌寫的以下作文．文中共有10處語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤，每句中最多有兩處．每處錯(cuò)誤僅涉及一個(gè)單詞的增加、刪除或修改．增加：在缺詞處加一個(gè)漏字符號(hào)（∧），并在其下面寫出該加的詞．刪除：把多余的詞用斜線（\）劃掉．修改：在錯(cuò)的詞下畫一橫線，并在該詞下面寫出修改后的詞．注意：1．每處錯(cuò)誤及其修改均僅限一詞； 2．只允許修改10處，多者（從第11處起）不計(jì)分．
I went shopping yesterday afternoon．It is seven o'clock when I was going home by bus．The bus was full of passengers，all of which kept silent．A mother with her little son was sitting nearby．All of sudden，the son cried loud．The mother tried to do what she could to make him stop crying．Thus，the son went on crying．After a long time，a man sitting next of the mother said angrily，"Why don't you give the child what he wants it．"The mother answered quietly，"I would if I could，and what he wants is your hat．"Heard this，all the passenger burst into laughter．

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分析 本文講述了作者在公交車上所見(jiàn)到的一幕，一個(gè)孩子大哭不止，坐在一旁的一個(gè)人忍不住了，生氣地對(duì)孩子的媽媽說(shuō)："你為什么不給他他想要的東西？"，媽媽平靜地回答："他想要的是你的帽子"．聽(tīng)到這里，車上的人都哄堂大笑．

解答 I went shopping yesterday afternoon．It is seven o'clock when I was going home by bus．The bus was full of passengers，all of which kept silent．A mother with her little son was sitting nearby．All of∧sudden，the son cried loud．The mother tried to do what she could to make him stop crying．Thus，the son went on crying．After a long time，a man sitting next of the mother said angrily，"Why don't you give the child what he wants it．"The mother answered quietly，"I would if I could，and what he wants is your hat．"Heard this，all the passenger burst into laughter．
詳解：
1．is改成was；考查動(dòng)詞的時(shí)態(tài)，這篇文章講的是yesterday afternoon的事情，故用一般過(guò)去時(shí)．
2．which改成whom；考查定語(yǔ)從句，這句話是"代詞+介詞+關(guān)系代詞"引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句，先行詞是passengers，指人，故which改成whom．
3．of后面加a；考查固定短語(yǔ)，all of a sudden是固定搭配，意為"突然"．
4．loud改成loudly；考查副詞，此處用副詞形式loudly作狀語(yǔ)修飾動(dòng)詞cried．
5．Thus改成However；考查句意關(guān)系，前面說(shuō)媽媽努力讓孩子不要哭，后面的句子說(shuō)男孩繼續(xù)哭，兩句話是轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系，故用表示轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系的副詞However．
6．of改成to；考查固定短語(yǔ)，詞組：next to意為"在…旁邊"．故of改成to．
7．去掉it；考查代詞，what引導(dǎo)的是賓語(yǔ)從句，在賓語(yǔ)從句中what作賓語(yǔ)，it是多余的，故去掉it．
8．a(chǎn)nd改成but；考查連詞，前面媽媽說(shuō)：如果我能我會(huì)做的，后面說(shuō)：但是他要的是你的帽子．兩句話是轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系，故用but．
9．Heard改成Hearing；考查分詞作狀語(yǔ)，這里用非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞作狀語(yǔ)，all the passengers和hear是主動(dòng)關(guān)系，用現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語(yǔ)Hearing．
10．passenger改成passengers；考查名詞單復(fù)數(shù)，passenger是可數(shù)名詞，和all搭配用復(fù)數(shù)passengers．

點(diǎn)評(píng) 短文改錯(cuò)首先要通讀全文，了解短文的中心思想，再分析句式結(jié)構(gòu)，弄清句子間的結(jié)構(gòu)關(guān)系，然后運(yùn)用所掌握的語(yǔ)法，詞匯等基本知識(shí)找出錯(cuò)誤加以改正．