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4．假如你是莉莉，準(zhǔn)備以"What Can We Do for the Environment"為題，寫(xiě)一篇保護(hù)環(huán)境的英語(yǔ)演講稿．
內(nèi)容包括：
1．在購(gòu)物時(shí)用布袋（cloth bag）替代塑料袋（plastic bag）；
2．盡可能地再利用使用過(guò)的課本；
3．離開(kāi)教室應(yīng)關(guān)燈；
4．最好走路或騎自行車(chē)上班；
5．簡(jiǎn)述理由：保護(hù)環(huán)境，減少污染，節(jié)約能源等．
注意：1．詞數(shù)：80詞左右．開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫(xiě)好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
2．可根據(jù)要點(diǎn)適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，使行文連貫；
What Can We Do for the Environment
Hello，everyone．I'm Lily．It's nice to speak about what we can do for the environment，and I think each of us can do a little bit to help with this problem．The first thing we can do is to use cloth bags instead of plastic bags when we go shopping．It helps to protect the environment．The second thing we can do，is to reuse the old textbooks as possible as we can．Also，we should never forget to turn off the lights when we leave the classrooms in order to save energy．What's more，it would be better if we walk or ride a bike to school．We should try our best to reduce pollution arid waste．
In fact，even the simplest everyday activities can make a real difference to the environment．I believe we can make the world a better place to live in．
Thank you for listening!

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是以"What Can We Do for the Environment"為題，寫(xiě)一篇保護(hù)環(huán)境的英語(yǔ)演講稿．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱主要為第一人稱．
寫(xiě)作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開(kāi)作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開(kāi)作文，即本文的寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)：
1．在購(gòu)物時(shí)用布袋替代塑料袋．
2．盡可能地再利用使用過(guò)的課本；
3．離開(kāi)教室應(yīng)關(guān)燈；
4．最好走路或騎自行車(chē)上班；
5．簡(jiǎn)述理由：保護(hù)環(huán)境，減少污染，節(jié)約能源等．
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)：
instead of 代替
as possible as we can盡可能地
forget to do sth 忘了去做某事
turn off 關(guān)…
in order to 為了…
try one's best to do sth竭盡全力做某事

【高分句型】
1．The first thing①we can do is ②to use cloth bags③instead of plastic  bags ④when we go shopping．
①we can do作為定語(yǔ)從句，修飾先行詞thing，關(guān)系詞which作為從句的賓語(yǔ)，可以省略．
②動(dòng)詞不定式做表語(yǔ)，與is構(gòu)成系表結(jié)構(gòu)．
③instead of 代替…而不是…
④when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句．
2．Also，we should never ①forget to ②turn off the lights③when we leave the classrooms ④in order to save energy．
①forget to do sth 忘了去做某事．
②turn off 關(guān)…
③when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句．
④in order to 為了…，表目的，做目的狀語(yǔ)．

解答 Hello，everyone．
     I'm Li Hua．It's nice to speak about what we can do for the environment  and I think each of us can do a little bit to help with this problem．The first thing we can do is to use cloth bags instead of plastic  bags when we go shopping．【高分句型】It helps to protect the environment．（．在購(gòu)物時(shí)用布袋替代塑料袋）The second thing we can do，is to reuse the old textbooks as possible as we can．
（盡可能地再利用使用過(guò)的課本）Also，we should never forget to turn off the lights when we leave the classrooms in order to save energy．【高分句型】（離開(kāi)教室應(yīng)關(guān)燈）What's more，it would be better if we walk or ride a bike to school．（最好走路或騎自行車(chē)上班）We should try our best to reduce pollution and waste．In fact，even the simplest everyday activities can make a real difference to the environment．I believe we can make the world a better place to live in．（理由）
Thank you for your listening!

點(diǎn)評(píng) 此為材料作文，要仔細(xì)審題，抓住重點(diǎn)，將所給信息條理清楚的表達(dá)出來(lái)，可使用一些表示順序的詞，使論述更明確，更有層次感．還要注意多使用一些委婉的提建議的句型，盡量使用不同的句型以避免文章枯燥單調(diào)．要求語(yǔ)句通順，語(yǔ)法，詞匯，時(shí)態(tài)正確，書(shū)寫(xiě)規(guī)范．