Question

16．Write a passage of at least 60words about the topic"Encouragement brings me power．"（根
據(jù)所給情景，請(qǐng)以"鼓勵(lì)帶給我力量"為題寫一篇不少于60個(gè)詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格）．
（注意：短文中不得出現(xiàn)考生的名、校名及其他相關(guān)信息，否則不予評(píng)分）．

Situation：In our daily life，we need lots of encouragement from our teachers，parents or friends．Please use one or two examples to show us your opinion on this topic and give your reason（s．．
（日常生活中我們需要來(lái)自多方的鼓勵(lì)．請(qǐng)你舉1-2個(gè)例子闡述你的觀點(diǎn)，并說(shuō)明理由）．

The following words and phrases are for your reference only．（下列詞語(yǔ)僅供參考）

difficulties          deal with        disappointed achievements        manage        powerful

Life is full of difficulties and the best way to fight against them is to stick to them．But we can't always go through these problems ourselves，so we need to gain encouragement from others．
Once I made a speech in front of the students from different schools．I tried hard to say out every word clearly and correctly．Unfortunately，I was so nervous that I forgot one part of my speech．I felt disappointed and almost wanted to give up．"You are great．"Someone shouted．Others then started to cheer me up．I suddenly became powerful and completed the speech perfectly．
From that time，I have realized that we do need encouragement from teachers，parents or even straigers，because it will give us much power to achieve our dreams．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是以"Encouragement brings me power．"為題談?wù)劰膭?lì)給我們帶來(lái)的力量，時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般過去時(shí)．人稱主要為第一人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點(diǎn)：
1日常生活中我們需要來(lái)自多方的鼓勵(lì)．
2一個(gè)事例
3感想
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)：
be full of 充滿
stick to 堅(jiān)持
try to do sth 盡力做某事
give up放棄
go through 經(jīng)歷
【高分句型】
1．①Unfortunately，I was ②so nervous that I forgot one part of my speech．
①Unfortunately不幸地，作為插入語(yǔ)．
②so…that如此…以致于…，引導(dǎo)的結(jié)果狀語(yǔ)從句．
2．From that time，I have realized ①that we ②do need encouragement from teachers，parents or even straigers，③because it will give us much power ④to achieve our dreams．
①realize后接的是that引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句．
②do在這里加強(qiáng)語(yǔ)氣，表示確實(shí)、的確．
③because引導(dǎo)的原因狀語(yǔ)從句．
④動(dòng)詞不定式作為目的狀語(yǔ)．

解答 Life is full of difficulties and the best way to fight against them is to stick to them．But we can't always go through these problems ourselves，so we need to gain encouragement from others．（日常生活中我們需要來(lái)自多方的鼓勵(lì)）
Once I made a speech in front of the students from different schools．I tried hard to say out every word clearly and correctly．Unfortunately，I was so nervous that I forgot one part of my speech．【高分句型】I felt disappointed and almost wanted to give up．"You are great．"Someone shouted．Others then started to cheer me up．I suddenly became powerful and completed the speech perfectly．（一個(gè)事例）
From that time，I have realized that we do need encouragement from teachers，parents or even straigers，because it will give us much power to achieve our dreams．【高分句型】（感想）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 以提綱提供情景的作文．要注意遣詞造句的靈活性和語(yǔ)法規(guī)則的正確性，就不會(huì)造成審題不清而偏離主題，但要注意，文章必須覆蓋所提供的各個(gè)提綱的要點(diǎn)．行文間要注意簡(jiǎn)化描述，用簡(jiǎn)短的語(yǔ)句代替冗長(zhǎng)的語(yǔ)句．在作文完成的時(shí)候，應(yīng)該檢查、修改，以免遺漏一些需要表達(dá)清楚的要點(diǎn)和細(xì)節(jié)．