Question

14．2015年的體育中考剛剛落下帷幕，雖然長跑是你的弱項，但經過努力和同學的幫助，你在測試
中獲得了滿分．為了分享你的經驗并展望未來，請你根據以下圖示，寫一篇英語短文向英語報投稿．
注：1、文章必須包括圖示內容，并適當發(fā)揮．
 2、注意連接詞和過渡語的運用．
3、詞數不少于80詞．短文首句僅供選擇使用，不計入總詞數．

I can't believe that I have got full mark in the long-distance race test．Believe it or not，I was afraid of running before．I thought it was too tiring．However，my friends encouraged me not to give up．And they often practiced running together with me．With their help，I made great progress．It helped me build up my confidence．As a result，I made it．
It is clear to everybody that the only way to make one's dream come true is to work hard．Just as the old saying goes"No pain，no gain．"In my opinion，if we put our heart into our study and help each other，we will get good results in the following exams or even anything we do．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇圖畫作文．內容是向英語報投稿分享你體育中考得滿分的經驗并展望未來，時態(tài)主要為一般現在時和一般過去時．人稱主要為第一、三人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點：
1．體育中考得滿分經過；之前害怕，在某人的幫助下，不放棄，最后成功了
2．經驗和展望未來；堅持努力，取的好成績
 
常用到的重點短語：
believe it or not 信不信由你
be afraid of doing sth 害怕做某事
encourage sb to do sth 鼓勵某人做某事
practice doing sth 鍛煉做某事
with one's help 在某人的幫助下
make progress 取得進步
make it 成功

【高分句型】
1．①It is clear to everybody that the only way②to make one's dream come true is③to work hard．
①it作為形式主語，that從句作為真正主語．
②動詞不定式做為后置定語，修飾前面的way．come true實現．
③動詞不定式做為表語，與is構成系表結構．
2．Just as the old saying goes"No pain，no gain．"
No pain，no gain不勞無獲，諺語的使用．
3．①In my opinion，②if we put our heart into our study and help each other，we will get good results in the following exams or even anything ③we do．
①In my opinion依我看來
②if引導的條件狀語從句，遵循主將從現的規(guī)則．
③省略了關系詞that的定語從句，修飾先行詞thing，關系詞that作為賓語，故省略．

解答 I can't believe that I have got full mark in the long-distance race test． Believe it or not，I was afraid of running before．I thought it was too tiring．However，my friends encouraged me not to give up．And they often practiced running together with me．With their help，I made great progress．It helped me build up my confidence．As a result，I made it．（體育中考得滿分經過）
It is clear to everybody that the only way to make one's dream come true is to work hard．【高分句型】Just as the old saying goes"No pain，no gain．"【高分句型】In my opinion，if we put our heart into our study and help each other，we will get good results in the following exams or even anything we do．【高分句型】（經驗和展望未來）

點評 這篇短文涵蓋了圖畫包含的所有要點內容，表達準確，意思連貫，符合邏輯．在文章的結構組織上很好地使用了簡單句和復合句，文章脈絡清晰、自然流暢．同時，使用了一些常用的句式和短語，這為文章增色不少．在學習中注意積累，背誦一些常用句式及短語，寫作時就可以適當引用，使文章的表達更有邏輯性，更富有條理．