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【題目】書(shū)面表達(dá)(共1小題，滿(mǎn)分1 5分)

請(qǐng)根據(jù)下面提示，以Modern Inventions為題，寫(xiě)一篇90詞左右的短文。(標(biāo)題、開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù))

Introduction	許多現(xiàn)代發(fā)明給我們的現(xiàn)代生活帶來(lái)了巨大的變化。
Main body	冰箱	以前人們使用鹽來(lái)幫助他們保存肉和魚(yú)�，F(xiàn)在人們用冰箱可以長(zhǎng)時(shí)間保存食物……
	洗衣機(jī)	過(guò)去，人們用手洗衣服……現(xiàn)在人們用洗衣機(jī)洗衣服，人們有了更多的時(shí)間來(lái)放松……
	飛機(jī)	很久以前，人們主要乘船去旅行�，F(xiàn)在……
	……	……(請(qǐng)例舉一項(xiàng)現(xiàn)代發(fā)明，并談一談其給我們的生活帶來(lái)的變化。)
Conclusion	總之，在現(xiàn)代發(fā)明的幫助下，我們的生活得到了極大的改善。

要求：1．文章條理清楚，語(yǔ)句連貫，必須包含以上要點(diǎn)，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，但不要逐字翻譯。

2．詞數(shù)90左右(給出部分不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)) 3．不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的校名和人名。

Modern Inventions

Many modern inventions have made great difference in our life．they have changed the way we live．

In a word, our life has improved greatly with the help of modern inventions

Answer 1

【答案】

One possible version：

Modern Inventions

Many modern inventions have made a great difference in our life. They have changed the way we live.

A long time ago, people used salt to help them keep fish or meat. Now they can use the fridge to keep food for a long time.

In the past, people washed clothes by hand. It was tiring. With the help of the washing machine, people can have more time to relax.

In the old days, people travelled by ship. Now planes have made journeys more comfortable.

People used to keep in touch with each other by writing letters. It often took long time. Now they can communicate by e-mail. It’s easier and faster.

In a word, our life has improved greatly with the help of modern invention.

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文，介紹現(xiàn)代發(fā)明給人們帶來(lái)的變化。結(jié)合所給材料，可知此處是現(xiàn)在和過(guò)去生活的比較，故本文主要考查一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般過(guò)去時(shí)，人稱(chēng)為第三人稱(chēng)，注意主謂一致問(wèn)題，句子結(jié)構(gòu)主要為系表結(jié)構(gòu)和動(dòng)賓結(jié)構(gòu)，注意一些常見(jiàn)句式的應(yīng)用，比如：people used salt to…，Now they can use the fridge to…，With the help of…，It often took…等句式的應(yīng)用。寫(xiě)作中注意運(yùn)用時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)，注意多種句式交替運(yùn)用。寫(xiě)作中注意敘述順序，符合邏輯關(guān)系，注意文章結(jié)尾處要與開(kāi)頭呼應(yīng)。

寫(xiě)作亮點(diǎn)：本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)練。開(kāi)頭介紹了我們的生活中發(fā)生了巨大變化，接下來(lái)現(xiàn)在和過(guò)去人們的生活比較，像食物保鮮、洗衣服、旅行、通訊等，最后總括我們的生活在現(xiàn)代發(fā)明的幫助下發(fā)生了很大變化。此處a long time ago, in the past, with the help of, keep in touch with, in a word等這些詞組的運(yùn)用也讓文章增色不少。