Question

10．母愛悄深，母愛無價；學(xué)會感恩，學(xué)會回報．某英語網(wǎng)站舉辦以"My mother"為題的英語征文活動．請你根據(jù)下列思維導(dǎo)圖提供的信息，寫一篇短文，介紹自己的母親和你們的真情故事．
提示：1．短文應(yīng)包括導(dǎo)圖中的全部信息，條理清楚，行文連貫，段落分明；
2．短文中不能出現(xiàn)真實的人名和地名．
3．詞數(shù)不少于80，開頭已給出：不計人總詞數(shù)．

My mother
We need love．Wealso need to love．The person I love most is my mother．My mother is 41 years old．She is of medium build with longblack hair．Shi is quiet．She is a history teacher in a middle school．Shelikes dancing．She can cook delicious food．
She did a lotfor me when I was a child．She bought whatever I needed for my study，eventhough she didn't have much money．She sent me from piano lessons to dancinglessons at the weekend．She cooked delicious and healthy food for me．
When I grow up，I will do what I can to make my mother happy．I will find a good job after Igraduate from college．I'll save money and buy beautiful clothes that make herlook still young．I'll take her to wonderful sights around China．Most importa ntly，I will stay with her when I have free time．That's what shewants most，I think．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是以"My mother"為題介紹自己的母親和你們的真情故事．時態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時和一般過去時．人稱主要為第一人稱和第三人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點：
1介紹：年齡，工作，外貌，能力，愛好
2她為我做的事
3我將會為她做什么
常用到的重點短語：
even though即使
grow up 長大
make sb+adj使某人怎么樣
like doing sth喜歡做某事
cook…for sb為某人做…
graduate from…從…畢業(yè)
高分句型：
1．She bought ①whatever I needed for my study，②even though she didn't have much money．
①whatever無論什么．引導(dǎo)的賓語從句，作為buy的賓語．
②even though引導(dǎo)的讓步狀語從句．
2．I'll save money and buy beautiful clothes that make her look still young．
that make her look still young是一定語從句，修飾先行詞clothes，關(guān)系詞that作為定語從句的主語，不可省略．

解答 My mother
We need love．We also need to love．The person I love most is my mother．The person I love most is my mother．My mother is 41 years old．She is of medium build with long black hair．Shi is quiet．She is a history teacher in a middle school．She likes dancing．She can cook delicious food．（介紹）
She did a lot for me when I was a child．She bought whatever I needed for my study，even though she didn't have much money．（高分句型）She sent me from piano lessons to dancing lessons at the weekend．She cooked delicious and healthy food for me．（她為我做的事）
When I grow up，I will do what I can to make my mother happy．I will find a good job after I graduate from college．I'll save money and buy beautiful clothes that make her look still young．（高分句型）I'll take her to wonderful sights around China．Most importantly，I will stay with her when I have free time．That's what she wants most，I think．（我將會為她做什么）

點評 本題是一篇圖表作文，圖表作為書面表達的一種信息提示方式，比提綱作文線索顯得更簡潔明了，寫作時也容易區(qū)分表達，本題在寫作時，要特別注意幾種情況的描述，不能逐句翻譯，同時要根據(jù)提示有效靈活的構(gòu)思，恰當(dāng)使用邏輯詞語，讓文章顯得有條理，不雜亂．